The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

In this infographic, there are 2 charts (a pie chart and a bar chart). The presented pie chart clearly illustrate the proportion of participant’s age for each course (drama, painting, sculpture, and language) at an adult education centre in 2009. While, the bar chart clearly presents the quantity of men and women attending in those course.
In the given pie chart, it can be explained that the proportion of participant’s age on 50 or over had accounted for the highest at 42%, 26% on 40-49 years; 16% on 30-33 years; 11% on aged under 20 and only 5% on 20-29 years.
In the bar chart, it is interesting that the figures participating in language course and in painting course were almost equal, there were 60 person (men 20 and women 40 person) in language course and 55 person in painting course (men 25 and women 30 person). Meanwhile, there were the number of participating in drama course about 30 person (men 10 and women 20 person). Finally, it can be seen that the quantity of participating in sculpture course were accounted for lowest, or abot at 15 person (men 10 and women 5 person).

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d under 20 and only 5% on 20-29 years. In the bar chart, it is interesting that...
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Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...here were 60 person men 20 and women 40 person in language course and 55 person in pai...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...men 40 person in language course and 55 person in painting course men 25 and women 30 ...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
... in painting course men 25 and women 30 person. Meanwhile, there were the number of pa...
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...rse about 30 person men 10 and women 20 person. Finally, it can be seen that the quant...
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Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...or abot at 15 person men 10 and women 5 person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 911.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69587628866 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92759909024 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9872829004 43.030603864 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.142857143 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57142857143 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354748113816 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.192761867817 0.103423049105 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747632171352 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239811392459 0.15604864568 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136674248586 0.0819641961636 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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