The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The chart illustrate the proportions of Australian males and females in variety of ages who did regular body activities in the year, 2010.

it obviously that women groups' averages are almost keep up than 47 per cent. Conversely, men which belonging 25 to 65 are lower 47 per cent. And it can see females did not decrease their regularly sport hobbies by following ages, until reached over 65 years old. The male categories which did more of physical activities are 15 to 24 and 55 to 64.

Overall,the highest group is women in 45 to 54, nearly 55 per cent; and the lowest is men which in 35 to 44, it is merely 39.5 per cent. Both of them in 65 and over, the number of percentages are 46.7%(male) and 47.1%(women).

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2019-07-02 Muhammad Shahid 67 view

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 586.0 965.302439024 61% => OK
No of words: 131.0 196.424390244 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47328244275 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.38312328216 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5558501342 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648854961832 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 171.0 283.868780488 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.2986983187 43.030603864 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7142857143 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.42857142857 5.23603664747 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267066957755 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115907283665 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933861917954 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199568414116 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982630859738 0.0819641961636 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.2329268293 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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