the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of men and women of different age brackets in australia who engaged in regular physical activity in the year of 2010.
Overall trend suggests that apart from the 15 to 24 age group, women of australia exercise more frequently in the subsequent age groups.

In the age group of 15 to 24, the men are ahead of the women by 4 percent at 52.8 percent. This number plummets to 42.2 percent where as the women stay intact at 48.9 percent in the 25 to 34 age bracket , thus putting the women ahead by 6 percent.

The women show consistent decrease in physical activity over the groups of 35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 with a difference of 13 percent, 10 percent and 8 percent respectively. In the final age bracket of 65 and above the the difference is reduced to a mere 1 percent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that apart from the 15 to 24 age group, women of australia exercise more frequen...
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Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
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...t. This number plummets to 42.2 percent where as the women stay intact at 48.9 percent i...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'bracket' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'brackets'.
Suggestion: brackets
...act at 48.9 percent in the 25 to 34 age bracket , thus putting the women ahead by 6 per...
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...48.9 percent in the 25 to 34 age bracket , thus putting the women ahead by 6 perce...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...n the final age bracket of 65 and above the the difference is reduced to a mere 1 perce...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
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...n the final age bracket of 65 and above the the difference is reduced to a mere 1 perce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, thus, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 680.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41558441558 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58990274989 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 199.8 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6253872344 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.333333333 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322434561728 0.215688989381 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182023981916 0.103423049105 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137725505347 0.0843802449381 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226276808148 0.15604864568 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148639266485 0.0819641961636 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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