the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups in 2010

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups in 2010

The bar illustrates the number of male and female people at different ages who did exercise on a regular basis in Australia in 2010.

Overall, as can be seen, women from 25 and older tended to do more regular physical activity than men did. By contrast, younger boys had more physical experience than girls.

From 15 to 24 age group, over half boys took part in physical activity exceeding the number of girls at 52,8 and 47,7 %. When it came to the age group from 25 to 44, female people tended to pay more attention to physical exercise over 52% in comparison with the male numbers just approximately 39,5%.

A higher percentage of males keened on exercise compared with the figure at the previous group hovering around 44%, while the figure for females was standstill at over 53%. The number of men and women at the oldest group were the same around 46-47%.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
Essays by user Minhthuminhthu… :

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 716.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67973856209 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37644595179 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614379084967 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 220.5 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2841945002 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.285714286 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176581278336 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851706350034 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538938426092 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108177321413 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433964166415 0.0819641961636 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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