The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The graph illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female in various age groups who did daily outdoor activities in 2010.

Overall, it is immediately clear that men did most exercise in age group of 15 to 24 while women aged 45 to 54 took most physical activities.

Looking into the detail more specifically, men accounted for the highest percentage in the youngest age group ( 15 to 24), stand at over 50%. However, from 25 to 44 years group, female tended to join outdoor activities more than male, while the ratio of male tended to decrease with age ( 42.2% and 39.5% respectively).

Following the next age groups, the rate of women did outdoor exercise on a regulaly basis is higher than that of men in the 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 years groups. The proportion of female reached 47.1%, with that percentage for male not far behind ( 46.7%) in the age group of 65 and over.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 722.0 965.302439024 75% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56962025316 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56247838342 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575949367089 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 17.3845397472 43.030603864 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 120.333333333 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297926389191 0.215688989381 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153393752113 0.103423049105 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720494386452 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198243973726 0.15604864568 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568319365795 0.0819641961636 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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