The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at leas

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart depicts the overall pattern of regular physical activity done by both males and females of Australia in 2010. Diagram includes different figures of various age group in percentage.

Overall, there was a notable disparity between males and females regarding regular physical activity. In terms of regular activity female surpass males by significant margin but except for some age groups. The lowest figure was recorded for males.

There was a peak of percentage ( which was 53.3%) for females of age group of 45 to 54. In comparison to male, female's figure was little bit lower than the males for the age group of 15 to 24 and had a difference of 5.1%. Figure shows the upward pattern for the age of ( 15 to 24) to (45 to 54).

Figure for regular physical activity's percentage for male was lower than female's figure. Male's data outraced female's data only one time for the young male's of age of 15 to 24. But early adulthood (25 to 34 ) and early middle age (35 to 44) males were not quit active in physical activity. Male's analytics for the age of 65 and also the adults over 65 were almost equal to the percentage of activity of females.

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... shows the upward pattern for the age of 15 to 24 to 45 to 54. Figure for regu...
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...f 15 to 24. But early adulthood 25 to 34 and early middle age 35 to 44 males were...
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... the percentage of activity of females.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60487804878 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3939046134 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482926829268 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 314.1 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.179356624 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.6666666667 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0833333333 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160969715864 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782300646512 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423899657332 0.0843802449381 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12711615624 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520878936702 0.0819641961636 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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