the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives some information about the percentage of male and female regular physical activity in six distinct groups in Australia in 2010.
It is obvious that, the women activity has downward trend among of all different age groups while men have fluctuation trend among youngest and oldest age groups. In all of the groups the percentage of women was higher than men except in the age youngest age group.
As can be seen, teenagers who were between 15 and 24 have most percentage of activity by 52.8% in men and it drop about 13 percent until 35 to 44and has a slight increased around 8 percent in remain three age groups. But the physical activity in women in the four first age groups have an upward trend approximately by 7 percent and after a plateaued trend in 45 to 64 has dropped nearly first age percentage again.
As a result, the physical activity among men in their first ages was a lot while in women it is true in their middle ages in Australia in 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'trended'.
Suggestion: trended
...s that, the women activity has downward trend among of all different age groups while...
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Line 2, column 166, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...mong youngest and oldest age groups. In all of the groups the percentage of women was high...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'age the youngest'.
Suggestion: age the youngest
...women was higher than men except in the age youngest age group. As can be seen, teenagers ...
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Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'drops'?
Suggestion: drops
...tage of activity by 52.8% in men and it drop about 13 percent until 35 to 44and has ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 804.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51685393258 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43840935277 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516853932584 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.4061789311 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6666666667 22.9334400587 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.23603664747 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309310701466 0.215688989381 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173800238093 0.103423049105 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555460794775 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203125599792 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044769206716 0.0819641961636 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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