the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives some information about the percentage of male and female regular physical activity in six distinct groups in Australia in 2010.
It is obvious that women's activity has a downward trend among all different age groups while men have a fluctuation trend among the youngest and oldest age groups. In all of the groups the percentage of women was higher than men except in the age youngest age group.
As can be seen, teenagers who are between 15 and 24 have the highest percentage of activity 52.8% in men and it drops about 13 percent until 35 to 44 and has a slight increase of around 8 percent in the remaining three age groups. But the physical activity in women in the four first age groups has an upward trend of approximately 7 percent and after a plateaued trend in 45 to 64 has dropped nearly first age percentage again.
As a result, the physical activity among men in their first ages was a lot while in women it is true in their middle ages in Australia in 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... the youngest and oldest age groups. In all of the groups the percentage of women was high...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'age the youngest'.
Suggestion: age the youngest
...women was higher than men except in the age youngest age group. As can be seen, teenagers w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46153846154 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47023092368 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505494505495 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.8642739919 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.23603664747 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31401815422 0.215688989381 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17513458319 0.103423049105 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546740620924 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204920328993 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436441171187 0.0819641961636 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.18 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... the youngest and oldest age groups. In all of the groups the percentage of women was high...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'age the youngest'.
Suggestion: age the youngest
...women was higher than men except in the age youngest age group. As can be seen, teenagers w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, while, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46153846154 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47023092368 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505494505495 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.8642739919 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.23603664747 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31401815422 0.215688989381 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17513458319 0.103423049105 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546740620924 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204920328993 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436441171187 0.0819641961636 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.18 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.