The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20 30 years who were asked to state which factors motivated them to succeed

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The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20-30 years who were asked to state which factors motivated them to succeed.

The bar chart gives information about the motivation to succeed based on a young professionals group from 20 to 30 years old.
Looking from an overall perspective, personal satisfaction and ambition were two primary factors for those people to pursue success. Other factors reached more than 20%.
As the chart portrays, 80% of those people were motivated by personal satisfaction or ambition, while 70% cited family pressure as their incentive. The figure for pressure from society contributed to 10%. It is noticing that there was a similar level of people were pushed to succeed by rivalry and desire for material things at 50% each reason.
On the other hand, about 45% of those people's encouragement was money, which closed to peers pressure at 1-2% lower. The top two lowest proportion was associated with fear of failure and envy at 25% and 30%, respectively. In addition, the percentage of surveyed who were motivated to achieve by feeling inadequate took a significant ratio of 32%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 88, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'peer'.
Suggestion: peer
...ncouragement was money, which closed to peers pressure at 1-2% lower. The top two low...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, while, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10429447853 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81348382243 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.680981595092 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9426841403 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4444444444 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254564475102 0.215688989381 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978713216965 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107284717437 0.0843802449381 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168105827266 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122479300799 0.0819641961636 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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