The bar chart compares the proportion of people in Australia who exercised on a regular basis in 2010, according to age and gender.

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The bar chart compares the proportion of people in Australia who exercised on a regular basis in 2010, according to age and gender.

The bar chart compares the proportion of people in Australia who exercised on a regular basis in 2010, according to age and gender.

Overall, women exercised more than men. It is also noticeable that boys aged 15 to 24 and women aged 45 to 54 accounted for the highest percentage of the total people who did regular exercise.

In 2010, over 50% of women aged 35 to 64 exercised regularly, while the figures for men in the same age groups were much lower, ranging from 39.5% to 45.1%. The 15 to 24 age group was the only group in which the proportion of males taking regular exercise was higher than that of females, 52% and 47.7% respectively.

Turning to the two remaining groups, 48.9% women at the age between 25 and 34 exercised on a regular basis, whereas the figure for the opposite sex in the same age group was only 42.2%. Men and women aged 65 or older who did regular physical activity accounted for a similar percentage, at around 47%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'exercised' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'exercises'.
Suggestion: exercises
...n 2010, over 50% of women aged 35 to 64 exercised regularly, while the figures for men in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 784.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55813953488 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45301990458 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563953488372 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7996365654 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422208586129 0.215688989381 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.24289289509 0.103423049105 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.310539948294 0.0843802449381 368% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372173229685 0.15604864568 238% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.362625571674 0.0819641961636 442% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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