The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Ages and Genders in the USA.

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The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Ages and Genders in the USA.

The bar chart provides the data on the number of Americans who suffer from myocardial in fraction base on age groups and sex.
It is apparent that men are prone to have heart attacks more than women in three age groups. The most significant feature is that heart attack cases for men is dramatically increasing by age. There were 123000 cases reported in the first age group and in the next age group ( 45 - 64 years old) about 300000 cases are added.
Another important point is that unlike the men, only a few cases of heart attacks are recorded for women, especially in the first age group (29-44) with roughly 3000 incidents. However, these figures tend to rise to 136000 occurences in the second age group (45-64)
Also worth noting is that both genders have high risk of heart attack in the last age group (65+). There are 440000 cases of men and 374000 cases of women.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...age. There were 123000 cases reported in the first age group and in the next age ...
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Line 2, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...irst age group and in the next age group 45 - 64 years old about 300000 cases are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 714.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54777070064 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14260838928 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624203821656 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1982686558 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239017630588 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116260219417 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563608083335 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145740009843 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483710381805 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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