The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of young Australians at the age of 5 to 14 years old, who are all engaged in various leisure activities such as skateboarding, riding a bike, watching television, playing computer games and art and craft.

Overall, watching television or videos is the most popular activity for both boys and girls during their free time. While skateboarding or rollerblading is the least popular for both genders.

All of the young children, both boys and girls, enjoyed watching television with the highest percentage of 100%. On the other hand, skateboarding is both their least favourite with two fifths and a third of boys and girls, respectively.

It is also significant that four out of five girls are both indulge in riding a bicycle and playing electronic and computer games. On the same manner, 3 in 5 boys are hooked to skateboard or rollerblade and arts and crafts.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, third, while, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 762.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04635761589 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95515656255 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602649006623 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 222.3 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0541928958 43.030603864 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.857142857 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.23603664747 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0722861925523 0.215688989381 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.02888738009 0.103423049105 28% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381966077415 0.0843802449381 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0424036765065 0.15604864568 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397050024242 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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