The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) ofdifferent types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

Essay topics:

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of
different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

The bar chart depicts the information of four different digital games being sold globally from 200 to 2006. Units are used in billions of dollars.

In general, handheld games stayed out the most as being the highest grossing games over the period given. However, in 6 years we can easily see the growth consumption of both mobile phone and online games while the console version saw a gradually decrease.
Initially, handheld games witnessed a sharp elevation as the figures for it jumped from below 12 to the peak of 18 billion dollars. Similar to this pattern, there was a upward trend of the online games despite the total amount of money earned in the first year was insignificant. At the end of the timeframe, approximately 8 billions of dollars are earned by this particular digital games.

By contrast, with regards to the total amount of console games earned in 7 years, there had been a moderate decline. This one type of games started off with beneath 6 billion dollars grossing in 2000 but end with only half of that in 2006.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
...ine games while the console version saw a gradually decrease. Initially, handheld games witnessed a...
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Line 4, column 167, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ars. Similar to this pattern, there was a upward trend of the online games despit...
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Line 4, column 323, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '8 billion'.
Suggestion: 8 billion
...the end of the timeframe, approximately 8 billions of dollars are earned by this particular d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, while, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77900552486 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51521422863 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613259668508 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0427821077 43.030603864 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1111111111 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.23603664747 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25960469183 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101363887757 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724534772475 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154074434864 0.15604864568 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617763119569 0.0819641961636 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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