The given bar graph illustrates the information about the ratio of obese adults in Japan,Finland,Australia and the USA from 1980 to 2000.
The given data suggests that in Japan less than 5% adults were affected by obesity. In 2000, ratio steadily increased as compared to 1980 and 1990. In Finland, during 1980, 5% adults were obese while in 1990 ratio rose up with 2%. In 2000, 10% overwight adults were in Finland. Australia had near about 10% overweight adults while after 10 year there was slightly change occured. In 2000, there was drmatically change in the ratio infact ratio climbed up at 20%.
On furthermore analysing, during 1980 the USA had less than fifth obese adults while in 1990, ratio reached at a quarter. In 2000, the USA had near about 30% adults who were affected by obesity.
Ovrall, the USA had maximum overwight adults while Japan had minimum obese adults. Australia also had obese adults in huge amount.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Finland
...about the ratio of obese adults in Japan,Finland,Australia and the USA from 1980 to 2000...
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Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...se while in 1990 ratio rose up with 2%. In 2000, 10% overwight adults were in Finl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 780.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90566037736 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66872769528 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51572327044 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 232.2 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7516895272 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.9090909091 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 22.9334400587 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.23603664747 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245483231339 0.215688989381 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11966551787 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638414443334 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164518332129 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691616898173 0.0819641961636 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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