The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make co

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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

Submitted by quyvo123 on Thu, 08/05/2021 - 07:12

Throughout 2009 till 2013, the bar statistic shows the percentage of companies worldwide for the five most important best-selling smartphone brands: Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG, and ZTE. Generally, revenues for Samsung, Apple, and ZTE improved over through the remainder of the timeframe, whereas shipments for Nokia and LG plummeted.
Samsung purchased 250 million smartphones in 2009, whilst Nokia purchased upwards to 450 million handsets, more than any other for the year. In comparison, by 2013, Nokia's retail sales had dropped significantly to little more than 250 million components, while Samsung's revenues had more than quadrupled to increase over time of 450 million cellphone segments.
It has been shown that Apple and LG had inverse patterns in smart phone sales, regardless of the fact that both models available somewhere around 150 million units in each of these three years. Apple's sales increased marginally, but LG's sales declined progressively. Ultimately, notwithstanding a modest increase in sales throughout 2009 until 2013, Zte phones continued to remain the lowest ranked.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: CONTINUE_TO_REMAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'remained'.
Suggestion: remained
... throughout 2009 until 2013, Zte phones continued to remain the lowest ranked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.61445783133 4.92477711251 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86876046688 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.680722891566 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8607823819 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.142857143 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109249994899 0.215688989381 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564116940379 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.026767894077 0.0843802449381 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744391113562 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257550800131 0.0819641961636 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 11.4140731707 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.06136585366 127% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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