The chart below shows the rate of males and females who were overweight in Austalia from 1980 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

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The chart below shows the rate of males and females who were overweight in Austalia from 1980 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar graph gives information about the proportion of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010

it is clear that the percentage of males being overweight in Australia was higher than that of females in 4 years. it is also noticeable that there were gradual increases in the figures for men and women throughout the period.

In 1980, there were 45% of overweight males, while the percentage of overweight females was only 30%. In 2000, overweight men saw a significant rise to 70%. Similarly, there was a moderate climb in the figure for women to 50%.

Over the next ten years, the proportion of men who is overweight decrease slightly to nearly 68%. Meanwhile the figure for female remains unchanged, at 50%

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 613.0 965.302439024 64% => OK
No of words: 125.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.904 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.34370152488 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71792862305 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 73.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 180.0 283.868780488 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9170538627 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5714285714 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166732951696 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073121974214 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617132449301 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107655971857 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220846757646 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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