The chart below shows the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart illustrates the outcome of a survey about factors that contribute to the happiness of people from the two different age groups.
Overall, it is noticeable that the Achievement at work element is the highest percentage in both age groups whilst the figure for Other factors is by far the lowest. Besides, people under 30 tend to be happy when they have a great appearance and travel while financial security and staying with family are the source of happiness of people over 30.
Achievement at work accounts for the highest proportion in both age groups, at 31% in the younger aged group and 32% in the older aged group, which is followed by the share of Doing hobbies factor, at 22% and 24%, respectively. By contrast, the lowest proportion of happiness in both age groups with just over 10% belongs to Other factors.
On the other hand, having a good looking contributes to a happy life of people under 30 while a fifth of older people vote that financial security is an important factor to their happiness. Similarly, traveling makes the younger age group happier, which makes up 15%, however, 14% of the older age group say that they feel most happy when being with their family.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 364, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ost happy when being with their family.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, look, similarly, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75598086124 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50773396787 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55023923445 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.0365949519 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8571428571 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228907460287 0.215688989381 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11413718487 0.103423049105 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590029938275 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152970774552 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381536507837 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.2329268293 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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