The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

Essay topics:

The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who had diabetes in Australia between 1980 and 2010.

A closer look at the bar chart highlights the fact that the number of overweight women experienced an increasing trend and was much less than that of men during the thirty-year period, from 1980 to 2010.

In 1980, the number of male who was overweight was nearly 20 percent higher than female. Over the next 10 years, the figure had not changed much for male, which was just over a half, however, 10 percent more of women had experienced diabetes. 2010 witnessed a dramatic growth in the number of obese male and a gradual increase in their counterpart’s figure, which both had reached their peak in this year. In the period end, the number of overweight women stabilised, while that of men went down slightly and both figures rose by 20 percent when compared to the beginning of the period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who had diabetes in Australia bet...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ht women experienced an increasing trend and was much less than that of men durin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 752.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7898089172 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66226799917 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579617834395 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 210.6 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9701788568 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225814332719 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116938236866 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847097195445 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187146751627 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626281948462 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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