The chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 to 2010

Essay topics:

The chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight
in Australia from 1980 to 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women who were overweight in Australia between the years 1980 and 2010.

Overall, the percentage of overweight males was higher than the corresponding number of overweight females, while the figure of both genders had risen over the period.

In 1980, 40 percent of men in this country were overweight and this figure was increased to nearly 50 percent in the next 10 years. Although, this proportion reached a peak in 2000 of approximately 65 percent, it then slightly reduced to just over 60 percent in 2010.

In contrast, the percentage of overweight females is generally lower than the counterpart figure of males. However, there was a steep rising of the overweight females percentage from just over 30 percent to 45 percent between the years 1980 and 1990. There was a further significant amount of increase in the next 10 years while the proportion of overweight women was over 50 percent. This figure was kept the same until 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'females'' or 'female's'?
Suggestion: females'; female's
...re was a steep rising of the overweight females percentage from just over 30 percent to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, then, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 844.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02380952381 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7703841511 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505952380952 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 240.3 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9526465379 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.5 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295079119922 0.215688989381 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136543340185 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100286344893 0.0843802449381 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196915734643 0.15604864568 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995000173711 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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