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The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

The pie charts give information about some of the main purposes for phone use by young adults in an African country during the 4-year period (2016-2019).
It is clear to see that young people appear to be attracted to social networking since the total percentage of young users on social networking is far more excelling than the other three main purposes, such as email, digital camera, and phone calls. In addition, its trend appeared to rise over the period mentioned.
At the beginning of the period, social network users made up approximately 50% of the total percentage. One year later, its proportion slightly decreased by nearly 2% before rising in 2018 at 51% and peaking at 56% at the end of the period.
In comparison to the first main reason for phone use, email was seen to be less used gradually over the period, from 25% to 19%. Young people in this country seem to have fewer phone calls over the years since the proportion of this use fluctuated and reached the highest rate at 13% in 2017 before falling to 5% in 2019. The percentage of people using digital cameras on their phones was seen to stay stable in the first two years (15%) before slightly increasing to 20% (2019).

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64928909953 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40030433146 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592417061611 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7566420858 43.030603864 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.625 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219603215575 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971221277014 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991284695932 0.0843802449381 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141532490893 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119372492117 0.0819641961636 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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