The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.IELTS

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The charts below show changes in the proportion of the energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003.
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The two pie charts present information about the comparison in energy generation from various sources, including oil, natural gas, coal, nuclear, hydro and other renewable sources, in a country in 1985 and 2003.

Overall, the use of some sources to produce energy increased with time, but the others decreased. While the traditional energy sources such as oil and nuclear went down, the consumption of coal and other renewable sources experienced an increase.

It can be seen from the pie charts that oil was the main sourced for energy production, despite its usage dramatically dropped from 52% in 1985 to 39% in 2003. Whereas, the percentage of natural gas rose from 13% to 23% over the given period. Likewise, consuming in coal went through a period of significant increase from 8% to 22%, exceeding the figure in nuclear, which had only 8%.

In comparison with the amount energy produced from hydro was accounted for 4% in the initial year which remained stable till 2003, the proportion of energy produced from other renewable sources increased from 1% to 4% over the given eighteen-year period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ropped from 52% in 1985 to 39% in 2003. Whereas, the percentage of natural gas rose fro...
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Line 7, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...e in nuclear, which had only 8%. In comparison with the amount energy produced from hy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, likewise, so, whereas, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 929.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1043956044 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66306727355 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587912087912 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9131980331 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.714285714 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253242862596 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115864379117 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795387074998 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162657139782 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586579723729 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.2329268293 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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