The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1995, 2005, and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph includes many changes about the number of Someland’s people who suffered from X disease over a 35-year period from 1960 to 1995.

Overall, it is clear that the number of infected people rose dramatically until the mid seventies and experienced a fivefold increase, remained stable for 5 years, before dropping to zero in the late 80s. After this time until the end of given period any case was not reported in this area.

At the beginning of the period, only 100 people contracted x disease. this figure remained constant for 5 years at the same level. The outbreak of had raged for a decade, with the number people infected rising by 400 cases and reaching a peak of 500 cases in 1970.

This circumstance was stable until 1975. Suddenly, a fortunate event occurred, with the number of people effected by X disease dropping markedly to zero in 1990. In the 5 last year, X disease appeared from this area.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...efore dropping to zero in the late 80s. After this time until the end of given period...
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Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
..., only 100 people contracted x disease. this figure remained constant for 5 years at...
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Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...years at the same level. The outbreak of had raged for a decade, with the number ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 778.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8024691358 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57068936956 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598765432099 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 233.1 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.7238955547 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4444444444 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.222222222222 5.23603664747 4% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0508397808529 0.215688989381 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0251123650387 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0253585709542 0.0843802449381 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0328471135256 0.15604864568 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149673982541 0.0819641961636 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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