The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Based on the survey, the pie charts illustrates the information about the activities which makes the younger and older people happy. Moreover, it is concentrating on age group of people under and over 30.

It is clearly evident that, nearly thirty percent of achievement at work makes more happy for all age groups. Doing hobbies accounts for approximately 25 % of the total. The highest percentages says that the achievement at work makes more happy.
Similarly, doing hobbies is the second most happiest activity.

On the other hand, many younger people regard having a good appearance as extremely important: 18% of them state this brings them most happiness. This is followed by 15% who state that travel brings them happiness. Neither of these two factors is mentioned by older people. Instead, 20% of older people report that having financial security is most important to their happiness and 14% say they feel most happy when they are with their family.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 40, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'happiest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: happiest
... Similarly, doing hobbies is the second most happiest activity. On the other hand, many yo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 40, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the happiest'.
Suggestion: most the happiest
... Similarly, doing hobbies is the second most happiest activity. On the other hand, many yo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, second, similarly, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 809.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12025316456 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5988620769 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645569620253 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7293170609 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251577995913 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858459373317 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741206913568 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135574037035 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881681768665 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.3012195122 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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