the diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

Essay topics:

the diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The two pictures compare the layout of a school for the year 2004 with the school site design is planned for 2024.

Overall, it can be seen that the main exchange for the future involves more construction of a new school building.

There were 2 schools which were separated by the path leading to a huge sports field for 600 students. In the Northwest of the maps, there was a car park next to the main entrance. Furthermore, the road in Southwest leading to these places. Additionally, the layout of the school site in 2024 is planned to build a new school building. Moreover, the number of students will be up to 1000 people. The sports field will be replaced by new construction. With the addition of a new school building, the path will created shorter to link the old schools. To be easier, the new road will be built to connect the main entrance with the new car park. Finally, the original car park, old road and the main entrance will be unchanged in the next 20 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... In 2024, the school will expand to a large number of 1000 pupils. The sports field will be r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 229, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Then
...e path will become shorter than in 2004.Then, the sports field will be demolished to...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, moreover, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 918.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65989847716 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54870867221 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48730964467 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3263499287 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5 112.824112599 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306702506722 0.215688989381 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138917375365 0.103423049105 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152531940988 0.0843802449381 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24307833269 0.15604864568 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157632321901 0.0819641961636 192% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 89.08 61.2550243902 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.3012195122 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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