The diagram below shows information about the amount of money spent on alcohol and drugs Summarize the info by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below shows information about the amount of money spent on alcohol and drugs.
Summarize the info by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the expenditure on alcohol and drugs over an eighteen - year period of time from 1975 to 1992.
A closer look at the chart highlights the fact that while the figure of drugs climbed significantly, the money spent on alcohol stayed almost unchanged in this time period.
More specifically, people spent just under 100 billion dollars on drugs in 1975, an increase of aroung 65 billion dollars. Whereas the sales of alcohol only climbed by 2 billion dollars with the figure of 146 and 148 billion dollars. The money used for alcohol, however, fluctuated every period of time and peaked at slightly over 185 billion dollars in the first years of the 1980s. In that year, not only the expenditure on alcohol but the one on drugs also reached the peak of just over 100 billion dollars before both figures dropped to the troughs with the sales at 104 and 65 billion dollars, respectively, in 1985.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...cohol and drugs over an eighteen - year period of time from 1975 to 1992. A closer look at th...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... for alcohol, however, fluctuated every period of time and peaked at slightly over 185 billion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74096385542 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46144933601 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55421686747 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.0920376175 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.166666667 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.23603664747 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0663402523501 0.215688989381 31% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403266053137 0.103423049105 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0214987884367 0.0843802449381 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0518936087741 0.15604864568 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226477898793 0.0819641961636 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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