The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar charts depicts comparative study regarding information on visits members to four different clubs in a metro city over the duration of seven month starting from January to July. Unit is measured in number of visitors.

Overall, the most notable point is that, the highest number of visitors noticed in the American Club in the month of June. However, Japanese Club was the only club which witnessed a least number of visitors in the month of January.

It is clearly seen from the graph that the number of visits to French Club had been nearly constant in the first six months, amounting to around 60000, whereas in the month of July, they increased to almost 78000. The most frequently in number of visits was also seen in the case of British Club where, members’ visits again remained in the range of around 60000.

Japanese Club observed nearly 39000 visitors in January and that increased to about 47000 in April, but after that, the visits decreased and remained steady about 43000. Finally, the clear winner in terms of number of visitors was the American Club, with nearly 80000 visitors for the first four months, and then the numbers soared to nearly 97000 in June and settled at about 85000 in July.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...a metro city over the duration of seven month starting from January to July. Unit is ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... Club was the only club which witnessed a least number of visitors in the month o...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, regarding, so, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1033.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87264150943 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27696843668 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528301886792 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8154908454 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.125 112.824112599 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 22.9334400587 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.23603664747 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117037660699 0.215688989381 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540479879962 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352406592052 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0758620206217 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232274175684 0.0819641961636 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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