The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The process in bricks manufacture for industry of building is displayed in the diagram.
Overall, to manufacture bricks is needed several ways, from digging the clay to delivering the products to suppliers. Furthermore, these procedures are consisted of production, incineration, and shipment.
Initially, the excavator digs soil, then this will be filtered to obtain clay by using metal grid, and it has been already rolled. Thereafter, it is mixed with sand and water before the mixture will be cut by wire cutter or will be molded in prior to being heated in oven. The next step is that the mixture is dried in an oven between one and two days.
After surpassing the previous procedure, this mixture is kilned in moderate temperature, ranged from 200 to 980 Celsius degree. Then, it is incinerated again in higher heat, with approximately more than a thousand Celsius degree in advance of sealed in cooling chamber. When it comes to the last stages, the bricks have to package before it will be delivered to building industry.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (3 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 861.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00581395349 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78373040157 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651162790698 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.703129713 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103015484078 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606332331745 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126208494546 0.0843802449381 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124513019875 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16525536669 0.0819641961636 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 861.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00581395349 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78373040157 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651162790698 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.703129713 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1111111111 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103015484078 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606332331745 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126208494546 0.0843802449381 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124513019875 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16525536669 0.0819641961636 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.