The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

These given diagrams demonstrate the transformation of West Park from 1950 to 2010 (over 60 years) which was divided into 2 periods. Generally, by 1950, there were 4 main areas in West Park (School, Playground, president area and farmland) then in 2010, science block, car park and sport field were added to the left of the Park instead of president area and farmland. but the school and playground still remained.

During the first periods, from 1950 to 1980, the West Park had a big difference by adding 3 new buildings (science block, car park and sport field) to replace farmland and people’s buildings. They are set next to each other and next to the school which was in the original position. for the sport field, its place was behind the science block, car park and next to the playground.

In the final stage, from 1980 to 2010, there were just a few alternatives in size. The car park was widened and it covered most of part of the left size areas. Next, the sport field and playground were minimized and put to the same part on the right below.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...instead of president area and farmland. but the school and playground still remaine...
^^^
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'buildings'' or 'building's'?
Suggestion: buildings'; building's
...rk had a big difference by adding 3 new buildings science block, car park and sport field...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ool which was in the original position. for the sport field, its place was behind t...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 870.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60317460317 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39573307508 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544973544974 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 233.1 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5117708704 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174216679974 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734713913433 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527334405982 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118379411501 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704542809216 0.0819641961636 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.0 61.2550243902 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...instead of president area and farmland. but the school and playground still remaine...
^^^
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'buildings'' or 'building's'?
Suggestion: buildings'; building's
...rk had a big difference by adding 3 new buildings science block, car park and sport field...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...ool which was in the original position. for the sport field, its place was behind t...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 870.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60317460317 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39573307508 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544973544974 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 233.1 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5117708704 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174216679974 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734713913433 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527334405982 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118379411501 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704542809216 0.0819641961636 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.0 61.2550243902 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.