The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

Essay topics:

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The given diagrams compare
the developments of secondary school
took place in Western Park.

It is noticeable that renewed area
involves making a number of changes to
the secondary school of Western Park,
mainly enlarging the parking zones
by demolishing a few accommodations.
There were no plans to change the main road ,
playground or main school building.

Looking at the maps in more detail , sports field has been constructed in 1980. The other physical structures that has it been introduced to the school
area are a science block , in the middle of the school area and a car parking to the western of the science block in the same year, by removing the old housing and farmland . In 2010, carpark was increased in its size and has become a main utility, whilst for sports field installed as a narrow space for physical activity in the east corner of the parking zone.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, second

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 744.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92715231788 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64213831984 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602649006623 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7836141834 43.030603864 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 3.83414634146 313% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24426354165 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122624395735 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718555036309 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0951881343539 0.15604864568 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717629932326 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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