The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermarkets and restaurants

Essay topics:

The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermarkets and restaurants

The diagram illustrates sugar production that processed by a German company for some food business companies. Overall, this sugar production has 8 stages that begin with sugar canes harvest and ended when sugar delivers to food companies that processed in tropical countries and in German.

First of all, in tropical region, the mature sugar canes harvest then compress in a crusher to collect the essence and produce the raw sugar after it is partially filtrate. Next, the raw sugar sends to companies in German from tropical countries to complete the purification process by melting and filtering process to formed sugar syrup. After that, the sugar syrup is crystallizing to make sugar crystals then it is drying using fans with low temperature and this procedure then produces sugar's final form. Finally, sugar packages in bags in different quantities and ready to delivery by container cars to food stores and supermarkets to sale it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed in tropical countries and in German. First of all, in tropical region, the ma...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'filtrated'.
Suggestion: filtrated
...uce the raw sugar after it is partially filtrate. Next, the raw sugar sends to companies...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, so, then, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 793.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21710526316 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65840764983 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592105263158 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.2607364549 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 132.166666667 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332988206932 0.215688989381 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185096947044 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117544823753 0.0843802449381 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293807657036 0.15604864568 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101141382536 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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