The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by lidiat on Fri, 11/23/2018 - 12:51

The diagram provides information about salmon’s live cycle.

Firstly, these animals start their live in the slowly movement up-river water as a tiny egg which was putting between reeds rood and miniature pieces of rocks. The development of embryo take about 5 to 6 month; when that develop is completed, the egg hatch and become in ‘fry’, 3 to 8 centimetres, which advance to rapid current river and spend there 4 years while they are increasing in size until growth more than 12 cm, named as ‘smolt’, in that period of their live they move to the sea and continue growing for 5 years previous to b adult salmon which is as big as a 70cm ruler and then, finally, it leave the open sea and go to calmly water to initiate the cycle again.

Summarising, the salmon has four live stages and each one take long time while the egg is the shortest and they live for about 9 years

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...development of embryo take about 5 to 6 month; when that develop is completed, the eg...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...id current river and spend there 4 years while they are increasing in size until ...
^^
Line 3, column 627, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'leaves'?
Suggestion: leaves
...g as a 70cm ruler and then, finally, it leave the open sea and go to calmly water to ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shortest and they live for about 9 years
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 745.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62732919255 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74321887524 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652173913043 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 225.0 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 183.893141525 43.030603864 427% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 186.25 112.824112599 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.25 22.9334400587 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0508345536495 0.215688989381 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047341126016 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535020274889 0.0843802449381 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617628842836 0.15604864568 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541046919055 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.2329268293 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 61.2550243902 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.3012195122 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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