the diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

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the diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

The maps illustrate the layout of a new school in 2004 with a proposed site scheme for 2024.
Overall, the main change of 2024 comes from a new school building. The school will be able significantly to add more students.
In 2024, the prediction is that a new school building will have constructed to replace the sports field, and the running path will have shortened along with the connection between the buildings. Additionally, the plant had cut down to the east of the sports field to make way for car park 2. Furthermore, a new road will also have built from the main entrance to car park 2.
With that, a sports field will have moved to the northeast of the forest as the third building and a second car park used place. In contrast, no changes with car park1, the main entrance, and the two school buildings together with the forest remain unchanged except for the sports field appear.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trate the layout of a new school in 2004 with a proposed site scheme for 2024. ...
^^
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with a proposed site scheme for 2024. Overall, the main change of 2024 comes f...
^^^
Line 4, column 295, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ged except for the sports field appear.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, second, so, third, except for, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 736.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47408442661 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54375 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 200.7 283.868780488 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0137131883 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.23603664747 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214504316546 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112223953018 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110971448307 0.0843802449381 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177509564727 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115743310428 0.0819641961636 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...trate the layout of a new school in 2004 with a proposed site scheme for 2024. ...
^^
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with a proposed site scheme for 2024. Overall, the main change of 2024 comes f...
^^^
Line 4, column 295, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ged except for the sports field appear.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, second, so, third, except for, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 736.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47408442661 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54375 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 200.7 283.868780488 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0137131883 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.23603664747 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214504316546 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112223953018 0.103423049105 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110971448307 0.0843802449381 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177509564727 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115743310428 0.0819641961636 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.