the diagrams below show the stages and aquipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Essay topics:

the diagrams below show the stages and aquipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The supplied pictures capture several phase of cement production from the raw materials and using the particular tools. Another step showcase the cement is mixed with another content for the ingredients of construction.

The first materials are limestones and clays. Both of them should be soften by crusher and it changes as a powder. The finished powder required to be mixed in order to change the texture using the heater. Second, the hot and soft powder is filtered by the grinder to be the cement as the main material. Next, it packed in a couple of bags and ready to distribute.

the process continue to aim the concrete product. First, it requires some collaboration between cement and water. The contain approximate 15% and 10% respectively. To mix it, it also needs another nature contents like sand in proportion 25% and small stones 50%. After a whole things have been inserted, it directly process by the concrete mixer and deliver the new material.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun phase seems to be countable; consider using: 'several phases'.
Suggestion: several phases
The supplied pictures capture several phase of cement production from the raw mater...
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Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'showcases'.
Suggestion: showcases
...sing the particular tools. Another step showcase the cement is mixed with another conten...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'softened'?
Suggestion: softened
...tones and clays. Both of them should be soften by crusher and it changes as a powder. ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...uple of bags and ready to distribute. the process continue to aim the concrete pr...
^^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...collaboration between cement and water. The contain approximate 15% and 10% respectively. T...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...25% and small stones 50%. After a whole things have been inserted, it directly process...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'processes'?
Suggestion: processes
... things have been inserted, it directly process by the concrete mixer and deliver the n...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 807.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98148148148 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66795236496 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635802469136 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1130776024 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.25 112.824112599 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5 22.9334400587 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17948179931 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552630066606 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503183923903 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117027761022 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434592385007 0.0819641961636 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 61.2550243902 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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