The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releva

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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagrams illustrate the process of cement production and how concrete is produced. It can be clearly seen that the cement production comprises four stages. While the producing of concrete consists of two stages.
According to the first diagram which explains the stages of cement’s formation. In the first stage, the clay is crushed with limestone to produce the powder. After that, the powder exposes to the heat inside rotating heater to turn into the grinder. Likewise, in the last stage, the grinder forms cement which transfers to bags.
When it comes to the second diagram which gives information about the production of concrete. In the first stage inside the cement mixer which mixed the water, cement, sand, and gravel by rates 10%, 15%, 25%, 50% respectively to form small stones.

to sum up, it is clear from the diagrams that there are four important stages in cement production while concrete production has two stages. Moreover, cement is produced by mixing two elements while concrete is produced by mixing four elements that gravel has the highest proportion.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ement production comprises four stages. While the producing of concrete consists of t...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r forms cement which transfers to bags. When it comes to the second diagram which gi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...% respectively to form small stones. to sum up, it is clear from the diagrams t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, likewise, moreover, second, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 918.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15730337079 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53043586532 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550561797753 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7436750197 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4545454545 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221359368959 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958495164723 0.103423049105 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052700647981 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143541255404 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264658066381 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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