The given line graph depicts the rate of visitors in Scotland who had a trip to 4 types of attractions between 1980 and 2010

The given line graph depicts the rate of visitors in Scotland who had a trip to 4 types of attractions between 1980 and 2010
What stands out from the graph is that there were two opposite trends for these 4 figures. While the number of people coming to zoo and castle witnessed a progress, tourist who visited aquarium and castle reducing over the same period.
Starting at a quite high point, the percentage of people who came to castle reached a peak at 45 % after climbing significantly from 1980 to 1995.Over the next 5 years, this figure went down instead of rising and then it remained unchanged to the end of the period. The proportion of who visiting festival compared with that of castle is much lower at the beginning of the period, only one third of the castle. It started fluctuating from 1980 to 2000 before increasing moderately to hit the peak at 20% in 2010
Turning into the downward trend of the other two, although the rate of the Scotland visitors coming to festival had the highest starting point, it declined generally and stopped at around 17% during the mentioned period. There were a remarkable rise in the number of tourists visiting aquarium before decreasing sharply and it became the lowest point of all the categories in the last year of the period.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Over
...limbing significantly from 1980 to 1995.Over the next 5 years, this figure went down...
^^^^
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...he end of the period. The proportion of who visiting festival compared with that of...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1060.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 225.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71111111111 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49342466806 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568888888889 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5669334016 43.030603864 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.666666667 112.824112599 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.5 22.9334400587 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.23603664747 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299496717876 0.215688989381 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150984632124 0.103423049105 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.229717217459 0.0843802449381 272% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301964444792 0.15604864568 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.403207346916 0.0819641961636 492% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.2329268293 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 61.2550243902 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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