The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities

The graph and table demonstrates the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in London, New York and Sydney.
Overall , what stand out from the graph there are considerably upward trends in Sydney and it is obvious that Sydney was at firs place, while London and New York fall dramatically over the period in the question.
Looking at the details as regards , the temperatures of Sydney in January and December were the same exactly 25°.From March to June the average temperatures declined gradually around 24° to 16°.In August and October temperatures in Sydney improved significantly from 17° to 23°.
If we look at London and New York the temperatures in March rose dramatically at around 28° and 24°.London's and New York's lowest temperature was in December approximately 7° and 5°.
The average number of hours of sunshine in Sydney were 2,473 , in New York 2,535 and lowest sunshine hours were in London with 1.180.It is evident from the graph that the higgest number of sunshine hours was in New York .

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, while, as regards

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02272727273 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77768888747 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505681818182 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.9972726427 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.8 112.824112599 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.2 22.9334400587 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.23603664747 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270951842159 0.215688989381 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197704779894 0.103423049105 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.201085818407 0.0843802449381 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197704779894 0.15604864568 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.201085818407 0.0819641961636 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.2329268293 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 61.2550243902 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.3012195122 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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