The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make c

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The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares the British typical daily demand for electricity in two different seasons (winter and summer) while the pie chart shows the different uses of electricity in an English household.

Firstly, the electricity is consumed constantly higher in winter than in summer. Normally, the biggest consumption of electricity is at 10 pm during winter , at 48000 units while it is at 2pm that energy use peaks with 20000 units of electricity. By contrast, 30000 units of electricity, which is the lowest, is consumed at 7am during winter whereas 130000 units is the least energy use during summer at around 8am.
When it comes to the uses, the heating facility consumes electricity the most , which is about 52.5%. Meanwhile, ovens, kettles, and washing machines also play a vital role in English home, with the proportion of 17.5%. The interesting thing is that we can see the same percentage in household appliances, such as TV, food mixers, electric tool and so on, which are divided to two parts and represent 15% respectively.
Overall, it is apparent that the need for electricity id higher during winter than during summer while the major use of electricity is to heat the rooms and water.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, whereas, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1001.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 200.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.005 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73007571335 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 305.1 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5023147487 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.125 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 22.9334400587 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.23603664747 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313202170131 0.215688989381 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137755906021 0.103423049105 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116746118572 0.0843802449381 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212256266173 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123721541484 0.0819641961636 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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