The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph demonstrates the percentages of some different industries of the Australian workforce from 1962 to 2012.
Overall, the figures for construction and mining saw a gradually increase. While the percentages of services experienced an upward trend, the data for manufacturing, agriculture saw a decline. Units in the essay are measured at percentages.
Regarding to the data of services experienced an increase in over 60 years. It began with just over a half in 1962, before climbing up to just under 80 in 2012. The figures of mining seemed unchanged, it stayed at 10 in over 60 years. Likewise, the percentages of mining stayed at just over 1 in 1962, then a slightly rise to just over 5 in 1982, before going down to over 1 in 2012.
On the other hand, the figures of manufacturing saw a decline to approximately 10 in 2012. It began with just over a one-fourth in 1962, before reducing steadily to over 10 in next 60 years. Finally, the proportion of agriculture underwent a drop through 60 years. It started at over a one-tenth in 1962, before decreasing to just under 5 in 2012.
- The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 11
- The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 67
- The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 11
- The diagrams below show two cutting tools made from stone They are from an early period and a later period of human history The tools were made by breaking off small pieces of stone Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features an 73
- In many countries today if people want to find work they have to move away from their families and friends Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages 56
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...figures for construction and mining saw a gradually increase. While the percentages of services expe...
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Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('rise') instead of another adjective.
...ing stayed at just over 1 in 1962, then a slightly rise to just over 5 in 1982, before going do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, likewise, regarding, so, then, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 33.7804878049 166% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75392670157 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02891233197 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465968586387 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 275.4 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8568441402 43.030603864 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.6666666667 112.824112599 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9166666667 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110960536557 0.215688989381 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489123262301 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772984952227 0.0843802449381 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105998795811 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106955357611 0.0819641961636 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.