The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given picture depicts the figure for the Australian in five industries in the period of 50 years from 19662 to 2012.

Overall, services were the dominant major in Australia with the highest figure of five industries, as opposed to mining which was least developed with the least percentage of workforce. It was also noticeable that the data of construction witnessed no modification.

Regarding the figure for Australian workforce in Services, it began at roughly 51%, then which rose to 65% in the next two decades. There was a upward inclination of this figure, it rose from 72% in 1992 to roughly 79% in the final year. In terms of mining, it commenced at about 0.5% in 1962, then witnessed a minimal rise to about 1% in 1972 and the data of the next two decades was equivalent to the record in 1972. Subsequently, the proportion of mining workforce in 2002 declined to 0,l% and finally increased slightly to 2%, which was lower than the figure of services by about 77%.

To talk about the figure for Australian workforce in manufacturing, it started at about 37% in the first years, after which observed a slight decline to 27% in 1972. From 1982 onward, the figure decreased considerably to approximately 11% and finished at 10% in the last year, which was higher than the figure of mining by approximately 8%. The agricultural workforce made up 10% in 1962, which is identical to the record of manufacturing in the last year. There was a downward trend in the percentage of the agricultural workforce, dramatically decreasing from 9% in 1972 to around 5% in 2002 and finally reaching about 3% in the last year. The proportion of laborers working in construction major stayed unchanged throughout 50 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, regarding, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 33.7804878049 213% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 965.302439024 149% => OK
No of words: 294.0 196.424390244 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88775510204 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90914173777 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 106.607317073 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482993197279 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 421.2 283.868780488 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8716806416 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0838275054252 0.215688989381 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036024538828 0.103423049105 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374368860976 0.0843802449381 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0676929904191 0.15604864568 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384899963713 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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