the graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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the graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of people aged over 65 for a period of 100 years in three different countries.

It is obvious that the proportion of elderly people in all three countries increases in that time period. Also Japan is expected to experience the most dramatic growth in percentage of people over 65 years old.

In 1940, about 9% of Americans aged more than 65 years, while the number for Swedish people is 7% and it is 5% for Japanese. During the next 60 years, the percentage of elderly people in the US and Sweden rose smoothly. However the rate remains almost the same for Japan until the early 2000s.

Looking into the future, a sharp growth in the proportion of elderly people is predicted for Japan with a jump of more than 25% between 2030 and 2040. By 2040, it is forecasted that around 27% of Japanese will be 65 or more, while the figure for Sweden and the US will be a little bit more than about 25% and 23% respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ountries increases in that time period. Also Japan is expected to experience the mos...
^^^^
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ple in the US and Sweden rose smoothly. However the rate remains almost the same for Ja...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... figure for Sweden and the US will be a little bit more than about 25% and 23% respectivel...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 792.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52571428571 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42985512292 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537142857143 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1638753313 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.23603664747 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0422874076005 0.215688989381 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0213059518491 0.103423049105 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.017828633506 0.0843802449381 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.031664014912 0.15604864568 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138050672454 0.0819641961636 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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