The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line graph Illustrates the proportion of the citizen who aged 65 and over in three various country from 1940 and show projection till 2040.

Overall ;It is clearly shown that ,in 1940 USA population was highest and Japan population was lowest in term of sinior citizen but in future opposite trend will be shown for same criteria.

In 1940, approximate 9% of USA population's aged 65 or above which increased slightly by 1% in 1960. Later, it increased gradually in following 20 years and reached 15%, till 2020 it was nearly stable. In addition prediction will be show that 23% USA people have age 65 or above in 2040.Moreover, same trend shown for Sweden, It have nearly 7%senior citizen population in 1940 which increased rapidely till 2015 and reached 20% ,its highest percentage compared to other nations for same time span .Then after slight felll down shown untill next decside and projection for 2040, that will be above 25%. Further more, For Japan, a debeased of 2% was noticed in the population of 1960 who aged above 65 or above, they reached 5% to 3%. After then it increased modeautely till 2020 and reached roughly 8% and forecast will be show that it increase rocketry and reach 27%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...f USA populations aged 65 or above which increased slightly by 1% in 1960. Later,...
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Suggestion: addition,
...15%, till 2020 it was nearly stable. In addition prediction will be show that 23% USA pe...
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Suggestion: Moreover
...USA people have age 65 or above in 2040.Moreover, same trend shown for Sweden, It have ...
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...e age 65 or above in 2040.Moreover, same trend shown for Sweden, It have nearly 7...
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...eover, same trend shown for Sweden, It have nearly 7%senior citizen population in 1...
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Suggestion: ,
...eased rapidely till 2015 and reached 20% ,its highest percentage compared to other...
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...ntage compared to other nations for same time span .Then after slight felll down ...
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...red to other nations for same time span .Then after slight felll down shown until...
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...creased modeautely till 2020 and reached roughly 8% and forecast will be show tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, moreover, then, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78571428571 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47234591655 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57619047619 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.6582964071 43.030603864 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.571428571 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173467389868 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10125813894 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953075114399 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159135631643 0.15604864568 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108189849704 0.0819641961636 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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