The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph illustrate the percentage of population aged 65 and over in japan, Sweden and USA from the 1940 to 2040.

Overall, the population of older people will increase sharply throughout the period. Initially, japan had the lowest percentage of population and it will be highest than USA and Sweden at the end of the period.

According to the graph, in 1940 the number of older people lived in USA and Sweden was about 9% and 7% respectively. People who are 65 and over was gradually increased in USA was 15% in 1980. The percentage of older people was almost same until 2020 and then it rose to almost 23% in 2040. On the other hand, in Sweden the number of older people was steadily increased and it exceeding USA to 15% in 2000. After 2000it continually increase to reaches almost25% in 2040and it will be higher than USA.

In 1940, the proportion of older people in japan was 5% which was the lowest number of people among three countries. It decline to almost 3% in 1980 and then it increased to 5% in 2000 which was same at beginning of the period. During 2000-2030 it rise to 10% and then it will dramatically increase to over 25% in 2040 which will be higher than other two countries.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...as about 9% and 7% respectively. People who are 65 and over was gradually increased in ...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ed and it exceeding USA to 15% in 2000. After 2000it continually increase to reaches ...
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Line 7, column 121, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'declines'?
Suggestion: declines
...ber of people among three countries. It decline to almost 3% in 1980 and then it increa...
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Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rises'?
Suggestion: rises
...ing of the period. During 2000-2030 it rise to 10% and then it will dramatically in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 992.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5296803653 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47959080315 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424657534247 0.547539520022 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.8621905499 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.1818181818 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9090909091 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09090909091 5.23603664747 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169551871448 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783508407666 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925651689688 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146804349523 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113306341854 0.0819641961636 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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