The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:150%">The diagram below illustrates the percentage of senior citizens
in the period of a century from 1940 to 2040 in three countries Japan, Sweden
and USA.</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:150%"><b>Overall, the figures were recorded with an upward trend for</b> the number of people who are 65-year-olds and over in the period given.</p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:150%">&nbsp;The percentage of elders in Japan, Sweden and USA started at around 5%, 7% and 9%
in 1940. Before being expected to witness <b>a modest growth about that of those</b> and
shoot up to a peak of 20%, 17% in Sweden and the USA in 2040, <b>the figure </b>gradually
increased from 7% to roughly 20%, and from 9% to 15% from 1940 to 2018.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="line-height:150%"><b>The figure in Japan, however, show an projected explosion</b>, starting at more than 7% in 2018, experiencing then a <b>threefold jump</b> before surpassing both Sweden and USA to soar to a peak of <b>roughly</b> 28% during the next 20 years from 2018.<o:p></o:p></p>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ward trend for the number of people who are 65-year-olds and over in the period giv...
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Line 10, column 105, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...;>The figure in Japan, however, show an projected explosion, starting at mo...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1048.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.46913580247 4.92477711251 131% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 7.42007147896 2.65546596893 279% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592592592593 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.4926829268 360% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.5 43.030603864 1% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 524.0 112.824112599 464% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.0 22.9334400587 353% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.23603664747 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 3.83414634146 209% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0480594037249 0.215688989381 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393584229329 0.103423049105 38% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00945155812132 0.0843802449381 11% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0351523699616 0.15604864568 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328395197146 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.5 13.2329268293 374% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.74 61.2550243902 -18% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 10.3012195122 339% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 21.43 11.4140731707 188% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.55 8.06136585366 143% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.4329268293 254% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 10.9970731707 313% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 35.0 11.0658536585 316% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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