The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000

The linegraph illustrates the number of men and women who smke in Someland between 1960 and 2000.

Overall, both the amount of male and female smokers declined over a 40 year period. About male, their tendency to use tobacco decreased.

To begin with, in 1960 there were 600 people who smoked were men, while the number of female smoker were significantly lower than male by 510 people. During the first 15 years, male smokers went down slightly about 500 people. In contrast, there was a steady increase in the number of women who smoked from around 90 people to a pea of 310 people between 1960 and 1975, despite the stable in the middle.

For the next 15 years, people probably had more knowledge about the negative impacts of cigarette, so both the number of male and female smokers decreased, but male smokers dropped consisently by 180 peple, where as there was a gradual fall in the number of smokers under 300 people. From 1990 to 2000, not only male smokers but also female smokers declned marginally by nearly 100 people.

In conclusion, it is clear to see that although the number of men who smoked had been dropped dramatically, it was still higher than female smokers.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...crease in the number of women who smoked from around 90 people to a pea of 310 pe...
^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...okers dropped consisently by 180 peple, where as there was a gradual fall in the number ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, while, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 987.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76811594203 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34285073513 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0185159213 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.666666667 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131182658222 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624552350858 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642899479492 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783286192178 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622853050051 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...crease in the number of women who smoked from around 90 people to a pea of 310 pe...
^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...okers dropped consisently by 180 peple, where as there was a gradual fall in the number ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, while, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 987.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76811594203 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34285073513 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0185159213 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.666666667 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131182658222 0.215688989381 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624552350858 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642899479492 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783286192178 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622853050051 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.