The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph represents the information about the yearly income of Bernie’s Buns;Lovely Loaves;Robbie’s Bakery from 2000 to 2010.
Overall, Lovely Loaves and Robbie’s Bakery income increased noticeably while Bernie's Buns income saw a dramatic decrease over the period shown. It is clear that Robbie’s Bakery got the lowest earnings in three bakeries.
In 2000,Bernie’s Buns had the biggest income about 80.000 pound sterling while Lovely Loaves just had about 55.000 pounds. At the same time the income of Robbie’s Bakery was 20.000 pounds.From 2000 to 2005, the income of Bernie’s Buns fell unexpectedly about 60.000 pounds while Robbie’s Bakery grew rapidly to 38.000 pounds. At that time,the Lovely Loaves income was unchanged about 55.000 pounds.
In 2006, the earning of Bernie’s Buns and Lovely Loaves were almost the same. From 2006 toward,Lovely Loaves earning continued to go up until reaching the peak in 2010 about 101.000 pounds. Whereas the figure for the earning of Bernie’s Buns went down considerably to 40.000 pounds. During the same period,the Robbie’s Bakery earning saw an substantial increase about 65.000 pounds

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s were almost the same. From 2006 toward,Lovely Loaves earning continued to go up until...
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...to 40.000 pounds. During the same period,the Robbie's Bakery earning saw an sub...
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...od,the Robbie's Bakery earning saw an substantial increase about 65.000 pound...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75706214689 4.92477711251 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2086615517 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54802259887 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0872242917 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.9 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.4 5.23603664747 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128248514289 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734971175261 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451454852058 0.0843802449381 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106820496898 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039861348758 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.83 11.4140731707 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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