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The employment patterns in areas such as industrial, technical, sales and office, other services and farming, fishing and foresting are illustrated in given line graph. The graph is drawn between year 1930 and year 2010.

Firstly, there is a slight growth in technical employment since 1930 to 2010, as its employment in 1930 was 0 while it became a little less than 40 in 2010, additionally its graph is increasing gradually. However, farming, fishing and foresting employment declined drastically from 1930 to 2010. It was the highest employment in the 1930 to almost 80, while all other employments were in between 0 to 10 significantly negligible around that time, although it came down to almost o employment in 2010.

Secondly, other employments such as industrial and sales and office were 10 at the time of 1930, but after some fluctuations in the sales and office its employment became twice as before in 2010 and industrial employment remained same after some fluctuations as before in 2010. Furthermore, other services were 0 at 1930and was continued to remain 0 till 1960, but after 1960 it increased dramatically till 2010 and became the peak employment in 2010 to almost 40.

In conclusion, as the time passed people were more interested for employment in technical, sales and office and other services rather than farming, fishing and foresting.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: CONTINUE_TO_REMAIN[1]
Message: Use simply 'remained'.
Suggestion: remained
...e, other services were 0 at 1930and was continued to remain 0 till 1960, but after 1960 it increase...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 6.8 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1147.0 965.302439024 119% => OK
No of words: 223.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14349775785 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91601906133 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47533632287 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7357398985 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.375 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 22.9334400587 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 5.23603664747 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0874100582364 0.215688989381 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058297021918 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087639767627 0.0843802449381 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841504811167 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124838374725 0.0819641961636 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.2329268293 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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