LINE GRAPHS
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
HELP ME CORRECT MY ESSAY AND MARK IT IF POSSIBLE. THANK YOU VERY MUCH.
MY ESSAY :
The first line graph illustrates the alteration in ownership of three categories of electrical appliances (washing machine, fridge and vacuum cleaner) and the second one compares how much time spent on doing chores in one nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall, it is obvious that over the period shown, the proportion of families that owned electrical appliances saw an upward trend. Meanwhile, the opposite was true for the number of hours doing housework per week in every household.
In 1920, almost no household had a refrigerator, while the percentage of families possessing vacuum cleaners and washing machines accounted for 30% and 40% respectively. In the next 40 years, the percentage of household ownership of refrigerators witnessed a soar to 90%, after which it rose to 100% till the end of the period. During this period, the proportion of households owning vacuum cleaners rocketed to 70% before reaching 100% in 2000 and staying unchanged until 2019.Besides, the percentage seen for ownership of washing machines also increased by 30% in this period, at which point it fell slightly to around 65% in 1980 and then grew to about 75% in 2019.
In the second graph, one can see that in 1920, one household allocated 50 hours weekly to do housework (including doing the laundry, cleaning and cooking). Additionally, this number went down more than half to around 20 hours in the following 20 years and then hit a low of 10 hours per week in 2019.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, second, so, then, while, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 33.7804878049 166% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 965.302439024 162% => OK
No of words: 309.0 196.424390244 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06796116505 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7548840368 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 106.607317073 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57928802589 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 283.868780488 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.8494771613 43.030603864 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 120.461538462 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 3.83414634146 209% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0702563602453 0.215688989381 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0189136128766 0.103423049105 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049410634836 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0299429688486 0.15604864568 19% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609143973827 0.0819641961636 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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