People doing dangerous sports activities like scuba diving and bungie jumping, they should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

People doing dangerous sports activities like scuba diving and bungie jumping, they should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believes that few number of sports people are responsible to manage their own lives owing to different danger sports and rescue workers do not need to stake their lives to save them. While I think, it is the responsibility of rescue men to save every individual's lives whether they are sports people or not.

Nowadays, it can be seen that tendency of sports has increased rapidly as compare to last couple of decades in different areas namely; cricket, baseball, scuba diving, sky dicing, bungie jumping, car and bike racing, swimming and many others that actually shows interest of country's people. Furthermore, mentor is very basic requirement in every sports that can train and handle every sports person to grow up their skills along with these, number of sports has highly risk factors which can ruin people lives for instance, Bike and car racing, wrestling and boxing, but, it does not mean that rescue workers should leave them for die who are eventually performing their duties at their wish.

In addition, every sport institutes ought to brain storming and train their students to save their lives first at their, end along with this, government need to implement sanctions on public or dangerous places where risk factor is high whether they are sports people or any others. Many intellectual people concern that government need to provide safe and healthy environment to sports people that eventually will outweigh the name of country at international level.

To sum up, it is the responsibility of every rescue workers to save people's life on a top priority, however sports people also need to consider as well of its adverse consequences, and it very essential for the government to provide better and save place to sports people for exercise.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
Some people believes that few number of sports people are responsible to man...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... sports that can train and handle every sports person to grow up their skills along wi...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'risked'.
Suggestion: risked
...with these, number of sports has highly risk factors which can ruin people lives for...
^^^^
Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve place to sports people for exercise.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for instance, i think, in addition, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 965.302439024 154% => OK
No of words: 294.0 196.424390244 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05782312925 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53745372114 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 106.607317073 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561224489796 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 283.868780488 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.4926829268 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5185645589 43.030603864 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 212.428571429 112.824112599 188% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.0 22.9334400587 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.5714285714 5.23603664747 316% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407695189386 0.215688989381 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193824574704 0.103423049105 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937751157557 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25208885053 0.15604864568 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743714415015 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.4 13.2329268293 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.31 61.2550243902 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 10.3012195122 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 40.7170731707 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.9970731707 171% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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