The pie chart below show the rate of online shopping sales for retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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The pie chart below show the rate of online shopping sales for retail sector in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie chart reveal the discrepancy in online shopping sales for retail sector in New Zealand over decade. In general, there were significant increases in some sectors, such as books, clothes, flim and music but the travel sector went down remarkably.
First of all, It is obvious that travel sector gain 36% of the total online sales over the time period. It was the majority of online sale in New Zealand in 2003. However, in 2013, a drop of 7% resulted in the same sector becoming category with the second biggest proportion of total online sales. The clothes's sale was a second major sector which accounted for 24% of total sales but It had a significant plummet to 16%, approximately in 2013.
Secondly, in 2013, the figure of film and music only reached 21% of the overall sales however it rose dramatically to 33% in 2013 and become the category with biggest proportion of the sector. A relatively small proportion of online sales was for books (19%) in 2013 which was slightly lower than in 2013 ( 22%)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the biggest'.
Suggestion: with the biggest
... to 33% in 2013 and become the category with biggest proportion of the sector. A relatively ...
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Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...13 which was slightly lower than in 2013 22%
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, as for, in general, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70056497175 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47089735043 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553672316384 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7244809357 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.23603664747 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411589854922 0.215688989381 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199595931253 0.103423049105 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148599146425 0.0843802449381 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27680517612 0.15604864568 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638175713725 0.0819641961636 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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