The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

The two pie charts given below show that the proportion of various kinds of average household extraction in Japan and Malaysia in a year. The data was illustrated in the percentage of average household expenses in 2010. It is clear from the charts that the highest trend in Malaysia was housing while the lowest in Japan was health care and in Malaysia was health care also.
Regarding to the first pie chart in Japan, transport was 29% which was the biggest percentage followed by food which had 24% third category was housing which got 21% the fourth category was transport which was 20% and the last was health care which was 6%.
on the other hand, in Malaysia starting from housing was 34% which was the highest percentage, followed by food which was 27% the third category was other goods and services which got 26% the fourth type was transport which was 10% and the end was healthcare which was 3%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...d the end was healthcare which was 3%.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, regarding, so, third, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.0 286% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 750.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65838509317 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28672675389 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472049689441 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 207.9 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.7747208858 43.030603864 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 112.824112599 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2 22.9334400587 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 5.23603664747 225% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16755419806 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185563699126 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.191265913631 0.0843802449381 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166135121405 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.190643895271 0.0819641961636 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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